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Arnold Flores posted an update 5 years, 10 months ago
A blood and guts type of question for everyone in the clubhouse.
Ive been putting my current problems on hold, and always taking too long to make a decisions.
So much headtrash, and just…waiting for magic to happen.
Ive got to make the move, but im completely scared of losing it all. Failing and looking like a loser.
But, a big…Read more
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Darren Kirby posted an update 6 years ago · updated 5 years, 10 months ago
Hey! Email sign up’s and product purchases, I would like some help with the copy for my website and product page as i’m getting visitors and no conversions!
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Sayed Hashimi posted an update 5 years, 10 months ago · updated 5 years, 10 months ago
hello everyone, My name is sayed hashimi and i am new member here. i own a digital advertising agency and i help sign printing companies to generate qualified leads for their business through facebook ads and google Adwords , i have a difficult time to close prospect on the phone as i do cold calling, i also lack at writing good and attractive…Read more
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Sayed Hashimi posted an update 5 years, 10 months ago
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Nick posted an update 5 years, 10 months ago · updated 5 years, 10 months ago
I’m building a desk products business, just starting to apply JC’s principles.
My ideal prospect is Dave.
Dave is a smart and highly educated middle manager who mans a cubicle 40 hrs/week.
He sees the holes in the way his boss runs the business but his boss NEVER LISTENS to him nor gives him any REAL AUTHORITY to make any REAL DECISIONS that…Read more
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Here’s the website, http://www.fitterhealtheirdad.com ive also watch some training on here about getting into the minds of my customers, i’m going to join some competitors programs to set what people in their community are talking about. Some critique of the website would be appreciated,
Are there any Ad words experts here?
Great advice Pete, I also had some hot seat coaching with John and Stan yesterday and the echoed some of your comments!
Thanks Pete, certainly not ignoring your advice i’m getting the text changed and will revert back. Thanks very much
I’ve followed your advice Pete, it would be great to get your feedback https://www.fitterhealthierdad.com/
Hi Darren
I think it looks pretty good.
If I remember correctly, you were giving away a 45-minute workout routine, which just sounded like a lot of work to me. This “4-step plan” sounds much more inviting.
Re the sales page for the No Gym Program, I would test the “buy now” CTA in the header. I think it would probably be premature to ask for…Read more
Thanks for your comments Virginia & Pete, the 4 Step plan is working as im getting email sign ups now
I’ve completely redone my sales page and would really appriceate your comments and feedback? https://www.fitterhealthierdad.com/no-gym-guide-for-dads-v2/
Our new sales page is live I would really appreciate some feedback on the copy https://www.fitterhealthierdad.com/no-gym-guide-for-dads/
Hi Darren: I think it looks pretty good.
I would add in a short part about you (your story and why you created the product).
You should have uniform capitalization in the heading (all words capitalized). Right now it looks random.
I would test the link to purchase in the header. It may be too early.
When I opened the page, I got a popup…Read more