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Edward Byrne posted an update 9 years, 1 month ago · updated 9 years, 1 month ago
I am reposting this with a link to the copy. Would really appreciate some opinion on this copy. It is a “negative reframe” of 2 alternatives to my product (a give up smoking eBook) My thanks.
cocoallegro Negative Reframe – cocoallegroNicotine Replacement Option negative reframe… -
JonathanC posted an update 9 years, 1 month ago
While looking up a Finnish customer\’s name (to see if it was actually a name) I stumbled upon this guy. I think he was in the DVD for SWS, no? The poker player. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Juha_Helppi
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Edward Byrne posted an update 9 years, 1 month ago · updated 9 years, 1 month ago
Am I allowed to post copy here for opinions from members or the team?
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Yes, you are, Edward.
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The Marketing Rebel Team wrote a new post 9 years, 1 month ago
John Carlton Copywriting Tips: Learn How to Write to Women
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Larry E. posted an update 9 years, 2 months ago
Just to let everyone know John\’s first RANT of the new year is ready to read and it\’s a great one!
If you didn\’t read December 2015 go back and read it cause you\’re missing out on a lot of great stuff!
http://www.John-Carlton.com
All my best,
Larry E
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Edward,
It’s hard to give feedback on 2 snippets of copy without knowing how they fit into the whole.
The first thing I’d check is if you are consistent in your warnings. Do smokers “… pretty much run our lives around smoking …” or “… run our lives…”.
I think you’ve made a case against each of these two options.
PS – I deleted you…Read more
Good point, thanks Stan.
‘pretty much’ is redundant
As I just put out a Sherman Platinum. (Oops, another deep tissue addiction) I found your copy intriguing as a whole. The “reward” and “deserved time out” resonates with smokers. (You’ve crawled into their heads!) I only smoke one a day, but I guess that’s how all addictions start.
Mark L – SWS Senior Instructor since 2008