Owen! Thank you!

You inspired me to read the post on LinkedIn which inspired me to leave this reply:…Read more

I enjoyed reading your reply David!

I’d appreciate being followed on LinkedIn by my mentor if you feel kind enough to do that lol >> https://www.linkedin.com/in/murph-the-writer/

Hi Owen: They are discussing how to release a swipe file for David, but it is not now available.

Since you are a Gold member of David’s Inner Circle, you already know this, but for anyone wondering about how to get access to more of David’s stuff, he has a very inexpensive Inner Circle membership which has as a bonus a breakdown of one of his…Read more

Thank you Virginia.

Can’t wait for that swipe file!

Owen, I hear you.

I’m on it.

Flattered by the demand for it.

Looking forward to it David!

Hi Togara, This is a very good start. Following a proven template is a good way to get started with copywriting. Or anything.

You’ve buried your biggest promise. If it’s true (as in, you would lose your medical license for making this claim), you want to move it up.

Don’t give me the chance to think, “I’ve heard this all before…” if you have…Read more

Hi, thank you, Stan, for pointing out the errors.

And thank you for the invitation to learn more. At the moment, the offer is steep for me, but I am considering it and will definitely be a part of it later.

Regarding the switch from arthritis to knee pain, back pain, and hip pain, arthritis affects these areas, so a person with arthritis who…Read more

Corrected Copy

Arthritis can be cured

Are you tired of living with the unbearable pain caused by arthritis? Are you ready to break free from the excruciating pain of this debilitating condition?

I am Dr. Togara Coswell Marechera MD, and I have the game-changing solution you’ve been waiting for.

For years, I have been helping people like you…Read more

Tagara, your corrected copy is better — more about ME, less about YOU. ; )

What I’d love to see now is a little mechanism and proof.

Just a bit about HOW it works.

And just a bit of proof that it works.

Corrected Copy.

Arthritis Can Be Cured!

Here are the corrected paragraphs:

Are you tired of living with the unbearable pain caused by arthritis? Are you ready to break free from the excruciating pain of this debilitating condition?

I am Dr. Togara Coswell Marechera, MD, and I have the game-changing solution you’ve been waiting for.

For…Read more

Welcome, John-Michael. When you have questions, feel free to post them here.

Welcome, John-Michael.

Thanks for sharing your story so eloquently and interestingly.

Hope you are staying dry there in SoCal and everything is ok.

Thank you Ma’am. I definitely will do @virginia-drew. I appreciate you welcoming me this morning. =)

And, OMG, Whoah. I cannot believe that it is really YOU @David Deutsch. What a special treat to have YOU comment on my post and writing. We are all safe and sound here in the rainstorm. Thank you for the well wishes.. =)

Talk more about me before you go on and on about other people.

I care about *me* losing weight. Not what you’ve done for others who are not like me. Tell me what you can do for me. Hook me with a benefit or two.

And then you can tell me it works for these kinds of people. Organize the design so I can scan that section and find myself.

>> You…Read more